In a descriptive paragraph it is important to "show" what you are trying to describe, not to "tell" it.
For example: One could say:
1. The soldier had a bandaged arm.
2. The soldier was fighting in a fierce battle near the border. There were few of his fellow fighters left. Most had been killed and the sound of the wounded echoed in his ears. His captain, who had led the troop into the battle, was lying next to him, with blood leaking from a gaping wound in his stomach. The captain gurgled a few words, "Tom, you are in charge. Take the remaining troops and go back to base." A flood of blood vomited out of his mouth and he breathed no more. Tom turned to call the order of retreat, and as he turned he felt a sharp, searing pain in his arm. He looked down and saw where the bullet had hit. He was wounded, but it was up to him to take the troops back. He shouted the order and, as if they were one, they all turned and fled back to base. As Tom got through the gates, he felt his head spin and he fell on the ground. When he woke up, his arm was bandaged, but he was happy that he was still alive.
Fill in the missing adjectives:
long, old, blue, beautiful, walking,
It was a day. The sun was shining, and there were no clouds in the sky. The man decided that he would go for a walk. He put on his cap, and his shoes. Took his walking stick from the closet and began his walk.
The lightening lit the starless sky. The waves crashed loudly on the rocks. It was hard to see the small ship that was being battered by the waves. On the ship there were two people. A young man and a young woman. They were recently married and had decided to rent this yacht for their honeymoon. The man had told his young and beautiful wife that he had many times sailed and he was an experienced sailor. Now she could see that this was not true. He struggled valiantly with the wheel, but his face was white and she could see his body trembling.
Answer the questions on the above story.
1. Was it day or night?
2. What was the weather?
3. How many people were on the ship?
4. Were they young or old?
5. Why were they on the ship?
6. How do you think the story ends?